First Draft Audience Feedback

From this feedback, I got the same kind of answers from the first feedback. Saying it looked really professional. She also commented on the message not being so clear until the end when it started to spiral. This shows me the audience kept wanting to watch the whole thing to therefore recognise the moral in the video for when it does become evident in the end. This is the approach I was going for to keep the viewers concentration. Also when it spirals and gets heated in the end it all happens quite fast, the viewer may not catch the story on the first view which creates a repeatability factor, as stated in the codes and conventions of a music video by 'Steve Archer'. This feedback said it needs no improvement.